Saturday, October 10, 2009

I want to...(Poem)

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I want to make you happy
All the days of our life
I want to see you smiling
As I say something nice
I want to satisfy your heart
With every blessing in the world

I want to save your pride
And mend your broken heart
I want to make you forget
That you were ever sad
I want to give you all
That you had ever wanted

I want to bring out the best
That you have inside of you
If only you will let me
I’ll never ever go away
Cos the greatest thing I want
Is just to be with you



27 comments:

  1. The AuthorOctober 10, 2009 9:47 AM

    Nice, warm ballad, without getting mushy.

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  2. MyneOctober 10, 2009 10:12 AM

    Thanks Nana.

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  3. AnonymousOctober 10, 2009 10:17 AM

    aww this is so sweet
    i need someone to dedicate smthn this nice to me
    lol
    i like!

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  4. AnonymousOctober 10, 2009 11:59 AM

    nice one.

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  5. kay9October 10, 2009 12:15 PM

    Myne-lady, hope dis poem isn't wasted. Oya, spill already - who is it for?? :)

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  6. ChiamakaOctober 10, 2009 1:12 PM

    Myne, is this for your own personal Edward lol! it's sweet

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  7. iphyigbogurlOctober 10, 2009 1:38 PM

    nice!!!
    i like how genuine it sounds....
    xx

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  8. MyneOctober 10, 2009 5:00 PM

    Thanks guys, this was written and dedicated to my SO, my own personal Eddy, LOL. So Kay9, it was not wasted.

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  9. TRYBESOctober 10, 2009 5:46 PM

    "If only you will let me,I’ll never ever go away"

    Beautiful and explicit words from the heart..

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  10. Original MgbekeOctober 10, 2009 8:07 PM

    I love this, very beautiful. Your SO is a very lucky man o. :-)

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  11. jhazmynOctober 11, 2009 9:03 AM

    I want to save your pride
    And mend your broken heart
    I want to make you forget
    That you were ever sad...

    For some reason, i like this part. Also the fact that the words used are everyday words, things that everyone can relate with...its not complicated or abstract

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  12. AdminOctober 11, 2009 9:39 AM

    hahaha,no comment

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  13. MyneOctober 11, 2009 10:34 AM

    Thanks all, I appreciate your comments.

    @Jhazmyn, I'm your everyday poet and writer. Thanks.

    @ Muyiwa, why no comment? LOL

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  14. The ActivistOctober 11, 2009 11:08 AM

    This is cool

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  15. juiceegalOctober 11, 2009 12:59 PM

    I want someone to write a poem like this for me :(
    Me likey

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  16. Posh CultureOctober 11, 2009 2:15 PM

    awwwwah!! This is really nice..
    Like Jhazmyn said, you use everyday words yet everything has so much meaning... Good Job:)

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  17. Nee Fe MiOctober 11, 2009 11:14 PM

    very nice...i like

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  18. AnonymousOctober 12, 2009 12:37 AM

    uhm, Myne, this is my 1st time of commenting on ur blog...I usually just read n move on, but this is sooooo.....nice...very touching...I don't know much about poetry, but weldone.

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  19. VOctober 12, 2009 6:28 AM

    awww..
    this is so sweet..
    x

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  20. histreasureOctober 12, 2009 10:18 AM

    Real...is what i call it..

    i like how it encapsulates the urge to give and give and give that envelopes you when you fall in love..

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  21. MyneOctober 12, 2009 10:44 AM

    Thanks for all your wonderful comments.

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  22. ManCeeOctober 12, 2009 2:15 PM

    Hmm...heartfelt eh?
    (making allusion to ur last post...Could it be that you are falling in love?)

    Reminds me of Ella Fitgerald's "..I want to be happy, but I cant be happy till I make you happy too.."

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  23. AnonymousOctober 12, 2009 9:15 PM

    Loooovely. In a perfect world both halves of every couple would be striving for this.

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  24. MyneOctober 12, 2009 10:35 PM

    Mancee and GNG, thanks.

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  25. BlessingOctober 15, 2009 7:04 PM

    this is niiiceee!!!

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  26. AndreaOctober 16, 2009 6:46 AM

    Myne is this for me, you shouldnt have.....
    I am sure is for your hubby. Very Sweet...

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  27. AnonymousOctober 18, 2009 12:36 PM

    This is a beautiful poem. I like the flow of the poem and how each line connects to the next. it was well written, in such a way that anyone can understand. kudos

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